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The Poetry Thread
Last post Sat, Jul 12 2008, 8:51 PM by switters. 65 replies.
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Wed, Apr 02 2008, 7:04 PM |
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Alright, here's my second submission thingy on here; I have mixed feeling about the structure & whatnot of this one, but I kinda enjoy the subject. See what ya'll think -- - "Conversation Kills" You’re poorly ill-informed”, says I, As to myself I say, “You’re starking mad and ugly, bad, Why won’t you go away?”
“You’ve got me now!” I smile, then scowl As to myself I say, “Let’s turn us in”, and wear a grin, “We can try things your way.”
“Then come with me, and quit your noise”, As I, to self, declare “You’re under arrest, don’t dare protest; For you’ve slain a man, unaware.”
“What’s meant by this? I’ve done no crime!” Then self tells me again, “Your madness surely’s slaughtered him; He hasn't longer to remain.”
Then suddenly my speech falls flat; Words out of mouth and head And to myself I say no more; For I find myself now dead. - - Laura
It's hard to start things over... you can feel the fire around us [all the time]
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Wed, Apr 02 2008, 8:00 PM |
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SarieInChains
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MiindOfDestructiveTaste: "Conversation Kills"You’re poorly ill-informed”, says I, As to myself I say, “You’re starking mad and ugly, bad, Why won’t you go away?”
“You’ve got me now!” I smile, then scowl As to myself I say, “Let’s turn us in”, and wear a grin, “We can try things your way.”
“Then come with me, and quit your noise”, As I, to self, declare “You’re under arrest, don’t dare protest; For you’ve slain a man, unaware.”
“What’s meant by this? I’ve done no crime!” Then self tells me again, “Your madness surely’s slaughtered him; He hasn't longer to remain.”
Then suddenly my speech falls flat; Words out of mouth and head And to myself I say no more; For I find myself now dead.
I do love the concept. The structure of it makes it interesting. I read it over a few times to let it sink in. I liked it. Its a bit refreshing from the poetry I usually find myself reading.
Body Evolution
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Wed, Apr 02 2008, 9:17 PM |
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Wed, Apr 02 2008, 10:39 PM |
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thenegativecreep: You guys are pretty awesome. I'm not usually a huge poetry fan, but a lot of these rock. You know, I think my teacher's supposed to start poetry English in a month-ish, umm... 
Thank ye, Sarie! (Again, I suck at quoting two things at once, so I'm condensing.) And I'm glad you're enticed, negativecreep! A month-ish?...We'll be timing you and expecting great things! - Laura
It's hard to start things over... you can feel the fire around us [all the time]
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Thu, Apr 03 2008, 11:53 AM |
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ChainsHead
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Well...here's some crap-tacular free verse I wrote a while ago. (And yes, I DID steal the title from Pearl Jam.) All Those Yesterdays
Memories are all we have left
Those glorious days
Hidden 'neath a grey fog Catch a glimpse of familiarity
Only to have the spark burn out Stoicism regains control Eyes turn away Mass confusion in turmoil writhes within Contentment with the present Longing for the golden days Weighing the heart False promises to reconcile Made through the grapevine Yet I believe What else can one do? Cold pessimism hides the fragile optimist To move on, trying in futility Yet how can I Surrounded as I am by familiarity? Memories haunt my waking dreams No matter the effort It won't ever be the same The void exists In our beings Evermore
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Thu, Apr 03 2008, 4:02 PM |
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SarieInChains
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ChainsHead: Well...here's some crap-tacular free verse I wrote a while ago. (And yes, I DID steal the title from Pearl Jam.) All Those Yesterdays
Memories are all we have left Those glorious days Hidden 'neath a grey fog Catch a glimpse of familiarity Only to have the spark burn out Stoicism regains control Eyes turn away Mass confusion in turmoil writhes within Contentment with the present Longing for the golden days Weighing the heart False promises to reconcile Made through the grapevine Yet I believe What else can one do? Cold pessimism hides the fragile optimist To move on, trying in futility Yet how can I Surrounded as I am by familiarity? Memories haunt my waking dreams No matter the effort It won't ever be the same The void exists In our beings Evermore
I love free verse.  "Cold pessimism hides the fragile optimist"..That totally jumped out at me. Good stuff.
Body Evolution
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Thu, Apr 03 2008, 8:55 PM |
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thenegativecreep
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MiindOfDestructiveTaste: thenegativecreep: You guys are pretty awesome. I'm not usually a huge poetry fan, but a lot of these rock. You know, I think my teacher's supposed to start poetry in English in a month-ish, umm... 
Thank ye, Sarie! (Again, I suck at quoting two things at once, so I'm condensing.) And I'm glad you're enticed, negativecreep! A month-ish?...We'll be timing you and expecting great things! - Laura
Wait, wait, I think you missed my subtle hint in there 
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Tue, Apr 15 2008, 10:12 PM |
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Ahhh, I've abandoned this thread for some time, but in hopes of reviving it, will post another short piece. (And, negativecreep - I get it now! Finally...haha...whatever you can make work for ya. ) This one was for an assignment a little over a year ago; I've got mixed feelings about it, but here 'tis anyhow: - I am from places that tell stories as they grow, Places up, over; down, and below Places that whisper, places that scream Places that spawn or shatter a dream.
I am from places dark and places light Places that cripple and yearn to take flight Places with dreams that blossom and thrive, Dreams which then struggle to keep still alive.
I am from places of which I am ashamed and am proud, Places I keep silent and embrace aloud Places that build me and tear me to shreds, Places that make me today who I am. - - Laura
It's hard to start things over... you can feel the fire around us [all the time]
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Tue, Apr 15 2008, 10:37 PM |
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Tue, Apr 15 2008, 10:54 PM |
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Tue, Apr 15 2008, 11:12 PM |
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SarieInChains:I quite like that one too Laura..man your just full of them 
Ahh, many thanks, all!  I'd love to hear anyone else's stuff if they're feeling in the...inspirational? mood...but no pressure!  - Laura
It's hard to start things over... you can feel the fire around us [all the time]
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Wed, Apr 16 2008, 12:02 AM |
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So far all attempts of finding my old poetry have failed >_< But heres something I wrote the other day, not to fond of it though . . . Laying in your bed Dreaming of the life you wish you had These things in which you dread All your weary hopes Feel so cold and dead Confusion and addiction All of this is you Through all the lies and fears Sadly all so true Drowning in a pool of tears The hopes in which you have All so dim and grave Falling further down Nothing but a frown
Be as honest as you like I'm planning on editing it later this was a pretty rushed version
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