shaggyDA:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 Laura, I liked your poem. You've got talent. I'm gonna put my nuts on the chopping block now & throw one of my own out there! I don't care about getting criticized ( Hell, I could probably use the feedback, positive or negative!)

 Shafts of light flow down like hesitant prayers/ dry my sullen tears

Teetering at the cliff of re-birth/wary of my footing

I take no headfirst dive/ mine is a careful descent toward mysterious waters

Glancing back with dubious departure/ I arrange myself beyond the radius- a familiar stranger once more

At times, trajectory intersects with fellow souls/ But ultimately we walk alone when night defeats the day

Boots are mired in the mud of apathy/ potential throttled by the absence of action

Will I transcend this dark decay? On the surface, all acidic wit and sarcastic grace

Sowing seeds of discontent with treacherous hand, I will tend to my bitter harvest

and anticipate Death's welcome embrace... 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Damn! Took me long enough to respond...but I'm back now, and must say I enjoyed it. No need to sacrifice your nuts, haha - I approve! Very interesting use of free verse.

And, thank you!

- Laura